Analysis of the Haiku structure
les yeux bleus
elle boit de l'eau de source -
veille de l'été
Daniel Py, France
cco 2003-06-2
Keywords
eyes blue summer water woman source
Structure of this haiku.
Used techniques :
* S21 - Caesura between L2 and L3.
Caesura between L2 and L3. The haiku is then often composed of a segment in L1-L2 including the Subject and a second in L3 with the Context (theme). This layout can lead to using L3 as an explanation of the discourse (conclusion) ; which spoils the discourse.
Version :2022-05-27
Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects
At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.
Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures
* avant - Just before.
We're just before something happens. The haiku captures the moment before the situation changes from one state to another. Like, for example, just before the rain or a thunderstorm..
Version :2020-08-28
Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.
At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.
Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content
* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku. (foliated)
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.
These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.
We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.
The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.
Surface : x---------------------------x
======
Depth: x----------------------------x
(x------------------------x )
- Two parallel speeches with sharing semes.
- Horizontal caesura/break (=)
- The author says something on the superficial level and something else on the deep level. These two discourses are linked by a sharing of semes.
possibly several different deep discourses
- Deep discourse: parallel - structural element: concordance
- Deep discourse: independent - structural element: discordance
- structural element: foliated
- the "foliated" structural element is always an explicit construction of the author.
- the foliated often leads to the concordance between surface and deep discourse. The deep discourse is then another aspect of the surface discourse.
Version :2020-08-28
Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.
At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.
Description level: 2-trait - Style,subject handling
* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.
A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.
Version :2019-12-11
Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects
At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.
Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)
* poesie - Use of poetical devices.
Presence of poetic devices which are typical of Western poetry. Contamination of the haiku genre by the author's literary and cultural background.
Version :2022-05-27
Effects: liavec - Binding to the reader's experience.
At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.
Description level: 2-style - Writing style.
* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. Archetypes are structures that have aggregated semes (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.
e.g. Night, Fire, Death, Fall, Frontier...
Night: gloomy, dark, cold, threatening (lack of visibility of potential dangers), dangerous (legacy of ancient times), loss of Light, linked to the Unconscious through dreams and nightmares, silent world, mysterious, unknown, populated by fantastical beings.
Version :2020-08-28
Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious
At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.
Description level: 6-inf - Active infrastructure (archetypes, dialectics)
Archetypes and dialectics
* A_Source - The Spring.
Version description: 2020-08-28
Times
* T_FuturPresent - Bubble of Future.
Version description: 2017-11-17
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Translated into English with the assistance of www.DeepL.com/Translator (free version)